This story was jam packed with syntax errors. What's worse is the editing; it could do with a serious overhaul when it comes to that. I found myself reading about the most nonsensical things when I should be reading about the development of the storyline. They felt like fillers that would be used when the word count was low.
This story should have definitely come with a warning for erotic asphyxiation. I can stand a lot of things in a sex scene but if they’re out of the norm and I’m not warned – well let’s just say I don’t take to kindly to those. One top of that, Fre has known Rhys for maybe 36 hours when they have their first sexual encounter and he does that to her, not once but twice --- WTF?
I wish I could focus on the other parts of the story but those got me so discombobulated, my interest waned at the halfway point in the story. From then on, the story line just gets more ridiculous. Rhys is a jerk throughout. Fre is a stripper – that’s it, no more -- no future aspirations that we know of, but then again, we didn't find out a lot about any of the characters. My absolute favorite is the Epilogue, it reads "Epilogue - Later that night." Really? An epilogue is later in the same day that the story just ended??
Happy Reading folks!
Scarby KassannaRelease Date: January 13, 2013Publisher: Sugar and Spice Press